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Another awesomely descriptive chapter! I just love how you describe Malfoy Manor in both the chapters. Your descriptions were very proportionate and believable with a slight touch of darkness. They are very effective here too. Great job!

I liked Yaxley's characterisation here too. He seems icy cold just like he's supposed to be in the books. I always find difficult to write such characters and I am trying to write some for Through The Darkest, so your Yaxley sounded very impressive to me. =]

There's just one little thing I'd like to say. I think you should tell us more about your OC and her connection to Holy Grail as soon as you can. Reading about her tortures and imprisonment only might get boring in future chapters. I just thought you should move the plot forward as soon as you can. :)

I also spotted a few grammatical errors (I make them too) like you wrote 'i instead of I and all. But they're minor though!

Overall, this is a very gripping dark story. I can't wait to find more about Holy Grail and her connection to it. :)
Hope I wasn't harsh!

Ashwini

Author's Response: Hi there!

I'm very glad that you liked the do scripting aspects of things and the way I characterization Yaxley. Honestly, I just tried to think of the most horrible man I could and tried to put him into a story haha

Also, I promise in chapter 3 you will find out everything you need to know and also in the chapters after that.

Thank you for the review!

Bella x


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