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Review:Penelope Inkwell says:
Iím back! : D

So, obviously I couldnít resist coming back for more. I must say, your MC has chutzpah. The fact that sheís been able to keep it together in the face of this torture is impressive, especially since you donít tiptoe around it in vague terms. You show it happening, and the signs of it having happened in the past. And she obviously has suffered, but sheís clearly a very strong person with a lot of control over her mind. I am so curious about this secret she is suffering for. If it isnít the Grail, but it grants immortality, whatever could it be?! It sounds like sheís got a plan, which I also respect. Sheís good at keeping it together, despite the incredibly challenging circumstances. Thatís admirable. So far, I like her.

I enjoyed the content of this chapter, but I couldnít help but notice it seemed a bit more rushed than the last one. There were quite a few capitalization and grammar errors, which was a bit distracting. Sometimes I wouldnít even make much of a note of that, but you have such a *lovely* core to your story, I hate to see it tarnished by little things. It seems to me that youíre churning out this story quickly, which is probably why (though I know that, as a reader, I certainly appreciate fast updates!) If you have a Beta look at it, Iím sure they could correct those little blips for you quite quickly, so this story can really shine as it deserves.

And Iím a bit of a grammar nazi, so there is that ; )

It was a very intriguing update and I am eager to know what happens next and where Draco comes into all this. I have every intention of reading onward. Iíve got to find out what on earth is going on with this secret!

Oh, and congratulations on your recent engagement! Thatís awesome! So happy for you!


Author's Response:

Our Imogen is a strong one isn't she? Atleast I hoped she would be! Way back from when this story was merely a few paragraphs of character drafts, I decided that she was going to be one heck of a girl. She's emotionally stronger and put together than most of my characters anyway :) however, she may come to falter in bravery in coming chapters but there's nothing too bad that our Imogen can't stand. So respectively, she does have a plan for the object she's hiding.

I do understand what you mean when you say that it's rushed. When I read through this and other chapters I did realise that the pace of them did sound slightly rushed. Hopefully, I will be able to go back and edit them soon!

Thank you so much for the review and the congratulations!

Bella x

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