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Review:Rumpelstiltskin says:
Draco being a leader is very fun for me (I don't know why). I especially enjoyed that he told the rest of them that they could not take a break.

Oh, I especially enjoyed this line: "a hill amongst many other hills." I found it quite poetic. It is the perfect amount of description to make the line very pretty. Then, of course, the rest of the paragraph had beautiful imagery. The word choice here "sun had tilt and spilt and rained down onto the earth, too lazy to clean itself up" was especially breathtaking. It reminded me of how somebody would describe a painting. And evidently it WAS a painting in Marla's kitchen ^.^. Good call, Rumpel.

Ooo...Transylvania and dragons. Things always get interesting when concerning Transylvania OR dragons. I can imagine that both will cause especially interesting situations.

I laugh when Arian called Draco's ego a "fascinating monster." :p

Word games are always entertaining, so I'm glad that Imogen decided to play one.

"She was out of frying pans..." oh man :D. That was funny.

Wow, the information provided about Marla's mother was disturbing. It sounds like depression to the point of mental instability, but I promise I will not psychoanalyze your character. It was very interesting to read.

The back story for Imogen's mother is also interesting. It's very romantic and I love romance (as well as action and adventure). I am curious to learn more about it.

There is a significant amount of information in this chapter. I find that sometimes, when I try to provide a lot of information, I tend to cause some confusion with the readers. That, to me, makes it even more impressive that all of the information is provided with an astounding amount of clarity :D!

The kingdom of Erebus? Oh this is exciting! You've even delved into some mythology? You've reduced me to squee-ing!!

I love that the drags have hunting hours. It would make sense that they would look for food during specific times, as most creatures do. And I just want to say that domesticating dragons sounds like a particularly dangerous hobby. But more power to Nikolas if that's what he's into. :)

This made me laugh, too, "I didnít get nearly enough credit in life for the times I managed not to die."

"Ladies first"? Baha...way to be a brave leader, Draco.

Between the dead wolf carcasses and they exchange of "I like your wolf", you had me laughing so hard that my fiance had to come and make sure I was okay. I think he was concerned for my mental health :).

This line, "the sound of raw power" was really beautiful as well. For such a small sentence, it has great impact.

This story is so incredibly unique while still tying into the HP world effortlessly. It is promising me adventure with a dragon! But I suppose I'll have to wait until the next chapter for "scaly's" appearance :).

I love this so much! *hugs chapter*

-Rumpel

Author's Response:
*sqeee I love your reviews!

I'm glad you're liking Draco; I feel like he's not getting the attention he deserves from me when it comes to writing him properly. Also, I'm glad you enjoyed the imagery and discription too even thought I will admit, the poetry and the picture link in Marla's living room as an accidental link but I'm glad it fit in! Haha

Transylvania and dragons...hmm..whatever could go wrong? :p

I'm really glad you enjoyed the chapter though; It was my favourite one to write!!

I hope to put chapter 12 in the queue tonight!!

Bella x


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