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Review:Penelope Inkwell says:
Hooray! New chapter!

Ouch, that was a rough game. But it was realistic. How could a brand new team that only had a week of good practice expect to measure up against one of the better teams in the league? Also, I like that you made Molly play poorly. It makes *her* more realistic, as well. I mean, sheís obviously capable, but even so. We all have our off days. I know that exact feeling she mentions, the one where, as much as you just want to tell yourself to get over it and do the job well, you can just feel in your bones that it isnít going to go well, and itís hard to come back from that. It was a very easy description to relate to.

Also, Fitz + Molly! Finally! All that sexual tension actually has an outlet! And that part was very well-written. You just see it all leading up to it, and...can it be? Will it happen? Surely n--Oh my gosh, YESSS!

So, that was great. Thanks for another chapter! Iím really enjoying this fic. I think itís time I favorited it, really.

--Penny

Author's Response: Everybody has off days! In my dance troupe, we call those performances the "let us never speak of this again" ones. Sometimes you just can't bring it. I'm glad that scene turned out. They were never going to win their first game, but going up against Montrose was an issue. If they'd played the Cannons first, maybe they would've shown up better. ;)

Writing those two having drunk flirtiness at the pub was very fun, I have to admit. I'm glad the reviewers are liking that :D

Thanks so much for reviewing, and for favoriting!


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