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Review:sharzamow says:
First off, well done, well done with being so consistent in first-person, and having it so easy to read and sort of smooth - honestly, I know lots of people write in first person but generally with fics I find it difficult to read first person as it can be a bit...awkward? Because you need such a strong grasp on the character, and the right balance of inner dialogue and outer dialogue etc. But I think you hit almost the perfect balance, and I got a nice idea of Alicia's character!

Mostly I just need to commend you on the fabulous idea you have for this fic - really original, really interesting - I love HP fics set in Hogwarts, of course, but it's lovely to have one set somewhere else, and in such an interesting environment!

I think I'd just like for the fic to move a wee bit slower, however - not at a boring pace, but I'd like more of a feel of Albus' character and his and Alicia's background/relationship, and a bit more on the other characters, too. I really love the sound of Nick in particular, and I'm interested in what's in store for Alicia and Albus already!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I actually prefer third person POV, although I'm growing to like first person POV more as I write it, so it's great to hear that you feel I'm consistent with my POV and with Alicia's characterization! :D

And I'm pleased you like the concept of this fic - as great as Hogwarts stories are, it's nice to have others too, especially with next-gen :D

Heh, I understand what you mean but it wouldn't be much of a novel if I gave away everything in the first chapter ;) Don't worry, you'll learn more about each character as the story progresses!


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