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Review:SkyEcho says:
Hi The Misfit!
I really enjoyed reading your first chapter! You have a really unique story idea and I look forward to finding out what happens next.

Your first person narration is consistent throughout the chapter. It's written in a way that's easy to read and I like that we can really hear Alicia's voice here.

I like her. She's been put in an uncomfortable situation, but does it because she really cares about her parents. That's definitely something I can relate to. I also really loved that her dad was the one holding out on signing the documents until he knew she would be ok working with Albus. That's really sweet and and shows the kind of relationship they have.
I also found it interesting that she's the one who was unfaithful. Although we can see that she takes ownership for that - we still don't really know how she feels about Albus now - so I look forward to seeing her work through that as the days progress.

The agency is also a really interesting idea, yet also realistic. I can imagine lots of people who would seek out its services. I liked how you introduced the staff with tiny glimpses into their personalities. It gives us enough information to become interested in them, yet not too much that it alters the pace of your chapter. I particularly liked the way Alicia described Nick. I definitely look forward to finding out more about the staff members.

Looking forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response: Hi! I'm glad you like the idea of this story, and that you want to read on! :D

I'm really pleased to hear that you're liking Alicia's narration so far, and her attitudes to those around her - her parents and Albus - and yes, she is closer to her dad than to her mum (but her sister is closer to her mum than her dad so it's probably normal in multi-child families?)

Yeah, I wanted a character who had screwed up and who feels guilty for her actions, and yes, there will be more about her unfaithfulness as time progresses :D

Ooooh, thank you! That is exactly what I was hoping to achieve with my introduction of her team, so I'm delighted to hear I was successful! And haha, Nick seems to be a favourite among the readers... HPFF seems to like it's bad boys ;)

The next chapter will be up soon!

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