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Review:marauderfan says:
Hi! Here for our review swap :)

This is a very powerful opening chapter! It starts off right in the thick of the action and raises a lot of questions. How did she get there? Why do they want her? And how does the Holy Grail tie in? (Side note: That is awesome. I love legend stuff like that and it's neat to see it appearing in HP.)

I really like the narrative style. The character (who at this point doesn't actually have a first name, but I think that adds to the effect) mentions something about haunting memories in the beginning, and for most of the chapter I'm not sure whether it's the memory or the present action. And that's really well done because I would imagine that after being stuck in the Malfoys' cellar for four months, you would lose track of time and reality. So, I liked the vague nature of the narration.

I'm really excited to see where this goes - it's not often that I find something set during the war and showing the darkest side of it, and the interactions between all the Death Eaters (you wrote the Death EAters well!)

Great job on this, and I look forward to reading more! :)

Author's Response: Hi!

Thank you so much for such a lovely review! I'm glad you like the vague sense of the chapter as I did want it to mimic a type of 'going in and out of consciousness' type of feeling as I wrote from the OC's point of view. I actually didn't even realise at all that I hadn't included the OC's name until after I had the chapter BETA'd and published; I tend to make silly mistakes like that all the time.

I'm so pleased you likes this though and I hope you read on!

Bella x


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