Hola! :) Thanks for entering my challenge and giving me this awesome entry! I'm so impressed you decided to stick with Reg and take on the challenge since he's such a minor character, and I have to say you did an incredible job of giving him a voice and making his story parallel canon in such fascinating ways.
The link of Mary MacDonald being his wife was so clever, since it's kind of assumed Mary was a Muggleborn from what happened to her at Hogwarts and of course Mary Cattermole was Muggleborn. So great job with that! She really made a wonderful Gryffindor here and I adored how fearless her character was.
I love how even though Reg's narration is simple, there are these amazing details which really paint a picture of their lives, like the kid who draws on the walls, and the dragon dung story- ha! I think that Reg is just an ordinary, good guy, yet to him his life is very exciting and fulfilling while others might just think of him as the maintenance guy at the Ministry who gets pushed around. I really liked getting to know him and seeing him change over the course of the story- I guess a lot of people would have had to when they got involved with the war, whether they wanted to or not.
I love how Mary is really an inspiration to Reg and keeps him strong with how vibrant she is. The scene where she leaves for the Ministry for her hearing was so sad, especially suspecting what's going to happen, and I especially liked the line about her being like a candle. It's funny, I remember feeling a little annoyed at Harry and co. for accidentally keeping Reg from being with Mary during her trial, but I suspect she might not have gotten away and gone on the run like she did here if they hadn't interfered, so I guess it did sort of work out!
Having Mary be on Potterwatch was so genius and a really great tie in with the books. I found it really fascinating how you explained how they got together in places like the basement of the Magical Menagerie, and it was wonderful how Mary and Reg's story was one of success. Another detail which was really cool was how Maisie was the one who told her dad about the radio channel: it mirrors the empowerment of young people and students in resisting Voldy when their parents are resigned and defeated, and was a really cool detail. :)
Reg's indecision about what to do was great and showed how he has to adjust and learn how to be heroic in this new world. I really enjoyed his scheme of speaking with Kingsley and the tension and fear was really apparent. It really showed how frightening and dangerous the Ministry would have been, since even Reg visiting Kingsley might be suspicious. Their speaking in code was really cool and showed how inter-connected people can be, even if they don't know each other, when they're fighting on the same side in the war. I liked how Kinsley knew who Reg was and even said "run away"... it was very sly :)
Aw, I'm so glad they're all back together and will be ok. And of course the war will end soon so hopefully they would have made it back to England. I got really attached to these characters, and I think you wrote them so well! :D I think the story is so original as I said before since it's about ordinary people who find ways to fight and be strong for their families in the midst of chaos.
Amazing job, and thanks again for entering! :D The results should be up in a couple days. :)
Author's Response: Ahh thank you! Writing Reg was quite difficult for me as I can't relate to him very much, so I really enjoyed the challenge of writing it!
I'm so glad you liked Mary's identity. I love making little links between things, and I was happy that that opportunity came up, to link two parts of canon together! I'm really glad you like the little details in the story too. I'm a sucker for details. And I think in Reg's case, since he has a pretty ordinary life, that the little things would be big for him, as you said. Hehe, the dragon dung story - that was a really subtle reference to the twins' prank on Percy during GoF. I figured that story would have made its way around the Ministry :p
I was a little annoyed at Harry and co. during that part in the books too - how even their best efforts separated a couple of vulnerable people. But at least they got some people out safe (or relatively safer.)
I'm so glad you liked the Potterwatch scenes too! In the books Potterwatch just seemed like the coolest thing ever and I had no idea how they ever made it work, so it was cool to explore that. I like the point you made about Maisie too! That's very true, given how many of the fighters in the battle of Hogwarts were students - young, empowered and bringing change.
Poor Reg :( Yeah he tried to be heroic, especially after doing so much waiting :/ It's wonderful to hear that you got attached to the characters though, that makes me so happy :) I'm glad you liked the codes and underground connection of the resistance. I figured that even people who weren't in the Order would have ways of communicating with one another, organising, and fighting back!
Thanks so much for the challenge!! It was a great idea and a lot of fun to participate!