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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hi, laurenzo7321 here with your requested review!!

Well this was a very different start to any other story I've read on here but to answer your question, yes, I would want to keep reading.

Your descriptions were lovely at the start, although I must admit I was a little shocked when it turned out that it was set in New York! Again this is very different to anything else I've read but I liked it.

Now I instantly have so many questions about the girl, but you give very little away which is good. My first thoughts are 'is she a witch?' and 'what happened to her to put her in this situation?' She recognised the wand the old woman had but was that because she knew it was a wand or because she was just guessing?

I loved your description of the woman... Her clothes in particular. You don't have to explicitly say she's a witch when you describe her like that. I suspected she might have been the cat but I like that you only hint that is the case because he hair matches the cats fur. So, what does she want with the girl?

This was a really well written start to your story and I very much enjoyed it and would want to read more, especially with the unanswered questions you've left me!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Hey! You are speedy!

I'm so glad you liked the sort of unorthodox start to this story. This whole story is pretty unorthodox in a way, so I hope it will continue keep you interested. I'm really please that people don't mind it started out in New York. I was afraid I would get blasted for having the cliche "American" OC, LOL.

YES! I sparked questions in your mind! That is a great thing for an author to hear, I think. I did try to give very little away in this prologue, so people would want to come back and find out more. As for what you asked - if she's a witch, how did she get in the situation she's in, etc - those answers come. Some faster than others, but they do come.

Aw, thank you. That was fun to think up a kooky outfit for the woman. And good guess on the cat! The next chapter shows what she wants with the girl.

Thank you so very much! Your review was lovely and I enjoyed it greatly! If you don't mind re-requests, I will snag you again so you can read on.


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