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Review:Leonore says:
Lily's father reminds me of Arthur Weasley, except the opposite way round. So excitable. And Lily's fear when the first wand doesn't work for her that maybe she's not a witch.

Nice to meet Remus - he's none of my favourite characters, especially to write. You're last lines - that's two of them now where you build up a happy mood then knock it down. Cruel, but good writing technique.

These chapters are good scene-setters. Enjoyable light reading, with just enough tension to provide interest. I expect the pace will build up as they arrive at Hogwarts, but this is fine for now. Some stories launch straight in to action, but obviously that wouldn't work here and this is a much more appropriate opening.

Author's Response: Firstly I have to apologise for the ridiculously late response to this review!! Real life has been crazy.

A few people have said Mr Evans reminds them of Arthur Weasley, I did not do this intentionally it's just the way he came out :) I'm glad he came out that way though!

Sorry the ending to this chapter was a bit cruel, but I'm glad you thought it was a good writing technique. I'm a bit cruel to Remus for a few chapters but it won't be for long :)

I'm glad you found this to be an enjoyable light read and that it was interesting. The pace does build up a bit soon - as you said, I felt it wouldn't have worked here to go straight into action and I'm glad you thought this was a more appropriate opening to the story :)

Thanks for the review, and sorry again for the late response!

Haronione ♥


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