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Review:Leonore says:
Blue v Bronze!

Poor Petunia! I love how you just had her being jealous and mean until right at the end. And Lily doesn't understand why her sister is so horrible, but its because she's upset.

The accidental magic she's done, particularly the ice-cream... Surely that would be pretty noticeable! I hadn't thought about it before, but your story made me realise that there should really be people to explain magic to parents of muggleborns after serious accidental magic. They should know because it's underage magic.

Yes, the ending is the highlight for me. Lily's fear of the unknown, leaving home for the first time. And her mother, upset but hiding it for Lily's sake. Then finally Petunia, trying not to cry.

Excellent grammar and flow added to the storyline make this an easy and enjoyable read. Well done.

Leonore

Author's Response: Hi Leonore :) Thank you for the review!

I don't think anyone is as mean as Petunia is to Lily without reason. I picture Lily and Petunia being very close as children and then all of a sudden everything changes because Lily goes off to Hogwarts. Here Petunia channels her upset at this change into being mean to Lily - changing the relationship between them even more.

You make a good point there, about the accidental magic. There should be people to explain accidental magic to parents of muggleborns, some of the accidental magic could be pretty scary - people may think they are going mad when they see it. Sorry waffling here...

I'm glad you liked the ending, it's my favourite bit of the chapter :)

I'm glad you found this to be an easy and enjoyable read! Thanks again for the great review :)

Haronione ♥


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