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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hey Adi!!

I'm so sorry it's taken me so long to come and review this! I'm so excited to see it up here!!

Your descriptions at the start paint a lovely and very vivid picture. You already start building an atmosphere too which is great. When reading I instantly have a feeling of dread almost. I'm definitely preparing myself for the worst. The suspense leading up to the bone chilling scream though is done very well and I both do and don't want to know what the men have seen to cause such strong reactions.

We find out though and it's not a pretty sight. Again, I love you descriptions here. Especially the part about the blood mingling with the crushed icicles making rubies. Beautiful imagery there, even though the topic isn't beautiful! I'm also left with a burning curiosity at the end of this little section. Who are these people and why are they dead? Why are they together in the graveyard. So many questions and so few answers... I want to know more!

We then move to the last section and I find I'm left with more questions than answers! Teddy obviously knows something has happened, and so does Maggie. Murder is far more common and Maggie just seems to talk in riddles. I liked her as a character though and I hope we see more of her and get some explanation as to why she is that way.

In this first chapter you most definitely grab a readers attention!! Great imagery and descriptions and you've done an awesome job of building the suspense.

Oh and thank you for the thank you my dear! I'm honoured to beta this for you! I'm really enjoying every second and I can't wait for the next chapters!

Lauren :)

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