|Review:||Courtney Dark says:|
This chapter was just, so, so, so, so, so (I could put a lot more so's in there, but that would probably get a little tedious and boring) perfect! It seriously had the perfect mix of everything - suspense, tension, action, romance, drama and some nice little fluffy Draco and Astoria moments on the side.
I loved that you told the whole unraveling of the Aurors entrance and fall of the Death Eaters from Astoria's point of view, because she's so innocent! The fact that Harry was Zabini and that Head Auror was Mulciber was pure genius - from the very beginning of this chapter, I had a strong feeling that Mulciber was 'good' and so I was glad to be proven right.
Though I hate to see Ron as the villain, I also enjoyed the conflict between he and Draco - after all, this story is from Astoria and Draco's point of view, so he is definitely going to seem a little bad guy-ish, I'm not sure that Draco and Ron will every entirely be able to forget the past. And also Ron tends to act before he thinks. I did love how Harry stood up for Draco though. It was just a tiny moment of reconciliation, but it just seemed so Harry!
I also think you ended this chapter in a great way, especially with that line: “She said yes.” I could almost see Draco's smiling face, and the thought made me want to smile, too.
Author's Response: Hi, Courtney! Sorry for being so slow to respond lately.
This chapter wound up with a lot more in it than I'd originally planned on, but that was a recurring theme throughout this story. There just always seemed to be another scene to write or another angle to explore. Fun times...
I'm really pleased that you liked seeing that from Astoria's PoV. I'd originally written it from Draco's and I went back and changed it to make the flow of the chapter better. In the end, I think it ended up improving things in other ways, too. Astoria isn't as war-weary as Draco, so she isn't aware of a lot of what was going on. That put a really different "spin" on her version of events. If you've read far enough into CoB -- and I'm afraid I can't recall whether you have -- you might recall Draco saying something to the effect of "Gamp tried to break into Azkaban with the Aurors and the village twit at his back." Well, Harry was the Auror who infiltrated Gamp's group and Goyle was the village twit. ;)
You pretty much summed up the situation with Ron. He's being a jerk, but probably not as big a jerk as he seems to be through Astoria's eyes. Ron and Draco will never completely bury their differences, although they'll be forced to deal with one another someday...
Gah, I went through so many different endings before I came up with that one. I was rather proud of myself, although I still have the nagging feeling that it could have been better...
Thanks so much for sticking with the story and for all of the awesome reviews!