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Review:toomanycurls says:

I quite like your narrative voice in this story. It's very distinct and easy to read. I really love how you unfold his character in the first few paragraphs. Bits of it stood out as quite funny - the pluto incident got me chuckling.

Ooh, his love life isn't quite right. :D That could lead to a lot of interesting plot. Ooh, ending a relationship. That is hard to do but, I agree that it's a bit cowardly not to end things.

I like that Molly is urging Albus out of his relationship. Their dialogue is easy and well done.

ha, it's highly ironic that Nyssa is there cheating on him. It's even more ironic that she was feeling the same relationship aloofness that Al felt.

His plan to find the radio DJ is quite funny. You've set up a great story foundation.

Author's Response: Hi! :)
Al is... an interesting guy, isn't he? I love how he enjoys the slow pacing of his life, but then suddenly everything speeds up and he needs to catch up. I'm the same in the way that I like to take things slowly and when they get hectic, I'm all.. out of it, lol. That's a trait I've been itching to potray in a character, so I've finally done it with Al. :)
I hope you like the rest of the story.

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