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Review:toomanycurls says:
Hello!!! I'm doing a review tag. :D

You start this with such dark and beautiful imagry. The ice, dark grounds, and howling wind make an understandably scary scene for the young wizard. Regulus' fear is quite justified. His father's words about fear being weakness struck me as ominous (maybe that's just because I had fear on the brain last month).

I wonder what emotions Orion hid from the world. That small flashback with him made me awfully curious. (Though - it might be helpful to italicize that part so it's clearly not in the current timeline of the story.)

Huh - Regulus might be the only person that called greeting Bellatrix a pleasure. Though, he probably really liked her. I really love that he calls her Bellatrix instead of Bella. It's formal which I think is appropriate for their relationship and the circumstances.

Lucius is so intimidating in this. I've gotten so used to him before Voldemort's return and after his downfall. I forget that he had a powerful place in the death eater world.

Dolohov is also quite impressive here. He just exudes power and authority.

This death eater training sounds more like torture. :-/ Voldemort's side is so well organized in the first war. I couldn't imagine going through that level of scrutiny.

Oh dear. The bit with the woman was haunting and devastating to read. His lingering reaction to killing that girl seems realistic and it shows he's still a bit good at least.

All of that leading up to the extrodinary branding of Regulus Black. This is an amazing start to your novel. There's so much churn and conflict to go through up until he betrays the Dark Lord.

-Rose

Author's Response: Hey there!

Oh, I'm glad you think so, as I always worry about imagery, wondering if I don't have enough or have gone overboard.

Yep, I can't really see anyone else using the word 'pleasure' anywhere near Bellatrix's name. She doesn't exactly exude pleasantness, does she?

I'm glad you thought this was a good start, the second chapter is coming soon!

Courtney:)


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