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Review:marauderfan says:
This is a great start! There isn't much out there about Andromeda so I was really excited to read it.

You've done really well showing a child's perspective in the Black family. I particularly liked Andromeda's innocent views of the house elf heads on the wall, how they were her friends, and she doesn't really understand how disturbing it is.

And this part as well: They went to see baby Regulus the other day, and he was sick all over Cissyís frock. That doesnít seem fine to her.

This is such a child-like thing to think. She doesn't really associate purebloods with being proper, because that sort of prejudice doesn't make sense to her yet - but she doesn't think they're much better because the baby was sick and it was gross haha. Basically I like the way you've done her perspective and what she focuses on as a kid.

Bellatrix was really well written too! You can see how she became who she was, its evident even as she's about 10 or so. It really makes me wonder what would have happened if she were raised in a family that didn't drill the pureblood stuff into her head, because she just repeated whatever her parents said. Anyway, I thought you did really well with her. And Lucius and Narcissa as awkward and confused little kids, I thought that was a nice touch as well.

You are a wonderful writer Kiana! This was a well written chapter and your characterisations are excellent. Keep up the great work! I'm sure I'll be back to read more ♥

Author's Response: Hey Kristin!

I'm so glad that you liked the child's perspective because they had such strange and twisted childhoods in comparison to other people's so delving into that was a lot of fun.

Haha, I liked that line too! I really liked your analysis of that line though because it makes perfect sense, to see how for Andromeda she still hasn't fully formed her views but is edging close to it, but with Bella she already has formed her views and is following the good pureblood line of the family.

I think with someone like Bella and how twisted she is, it would begin to show now and it's rather scary at that. It is interesting to ponder that, and I would like to think she would have been normal because the parent's influence upon the child is a great one. Bahaha, I loved your description of Lucius and Narcissa it had me chuckling away :P

Thank you for such a wonderful review Kristin, it really did make me smile! I hope you do stick around too, as that would mean a lot to me!

-Kiana


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