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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey Adi! Here with the swap :D

Aw, Astoria was so cute! I love the way she sort of stalked him throughout her whole time at Hogwarts. Iím dying to know now whether Draco actually went to those places when she told him to meet her at in Hogsmeade that would have been so cute if she had. Another thing I liked about it was that it enabled you to provide a lot of backstory about her without it getting boring and it was humorous in a way too with the way she kept on watching him and wishing him and yet he never noticed.

A noticed a few minor cases of when you slipped into the present tense, I think they were in the first section so when youíre editing this it might be good to look out for those.

I liked the idea of the Greengrasses being passive throughout the war as that fitted with my mental image of them being like that. Plus, it sort of resembled a fresh start for Draco if the person heís going to marry was aligned to neither side meaning that they can decide their future together and be really cute and coupley together.

Their meeting in Diagon Alley was really great! It just had the right levels of everything and made me all gushy and yeah. I liked how you made Draco at ease with her because that would be natural given that she is the sister of his best friendís fiancťe, but I would still try and maintain a little reserve because Draco was always a recluse and given how the war ended I can only imagine that it made his reclusness even worse.

The way you always referred to Draco as you was really great. I mean, I knew it was Draco but there was that small bit of suspense over whether it could be someone else or not. It was also great as the me in this is Astoria and the you is Draco so itís like me and you when you put the narration together (ok that makes no sense here but it does in my head, so Iíll carry on anyway) and yeah it makes them like a couple.

Then the ending was great! Iím really intrigued about how Astoria asks him now because she seemed sort of shy throughout so Iím guessing a letter but she may have changed and done it face to face. I really liked this first chapter and I am eager to read more so let me know when the next is up! ♥


(also, this is my 900th review (I think?) so I hope you enjoy it, and if it isnít I hope you enjoy review 899 :P)

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