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Review:MargaretLane says:
Yay, I'm so pleased to see this up. Well, you know I love this story.

"Well said." should have a full stop after it as the smiling is separate. You don't really smile your words. Same with the comment before "I shrug."

And yikes, that must have been such a hard decision for Emily to make. No wonder she's so traumatised. I know she went through a whole lot more too, but that alone would be pretty stressful.

Oh, I'm looking forward to hearing more about her time on the run.

I like your mention of why she couldn't go abroad, because obviously, it must have been difficult or more Muggleborns would have done so. I actually have it as part of the background for one of my characters that their mother is Muggleborn (this is next generation era and this character would have been about 4 or 5 during the war) and they escaped abroad when things started getting dodgy. It'll probably never come up; I just think this character has enough drama without adding in war trauma. So it was funny to see the issue discussed here.

Wow, Patricia is a real friend. I'm getting a little freaked out that something bad happened to her. The past tense doesn't sound good. Not sure I'd put my life in danger for many people like that.

"Parents'" should have the apostrophe after the "s" as presumably she has two of them.

Love the line "she laughs but I do not join it." There's something wonderfully ominous about it.

And the "attic room" reminds me of Anne Frank.

*sighs with relief* Nobody in Patricia's family was harmed; that's good.

*cracks up at them calling her Mrs. Scrivenshaft* But then, I'm Irish; I know businesses in other countries can be rather more formal. And the twins were called Mr. Weasley and Mr. Weasley. We didn't even call our lecturers by their surnames at college (maybe uni to you), let alone people we work with.

I think it should be "who's so much older than me" and not "whose so much older than me", as the "who's" is short for "who is."

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