A good writer should be able to make their readers feel what their characters feel. Have them feel every emotion that they are reading off the page, be it anger or happiness, bitterness or ectasy. If they are skilled enough writers, than their words should be able to magic their readers away with their words (pun intended).
You have done all of this.
All the anger, all the frustration, everything that the characters are feeling, I'm feeling.
It's kind of strange, actually. Here I am, previously in an alright mood, I decide to read some chapters of this story and BANG, I am irritated and rather angry because of words on a page.
When I think about it, it's actually pretty amazing. A little creepy, that your words can have such an impact on my mood; but it's still interesting.
The fic itself.
I was really quite annoyed and angry with Harry in this chapter (the entire novel, really, but I digress). I mean, how can he doubt his sons when one of them is lying, bruised and broken, on a hospital bed?
One of the things that I do when I read is that I like to put myself in the situacion, I like to imagine what I would say if I am in the story. Something that I would have really liked to tell Harry in this particular chaper goes something like this: "With all due respect, Mr. Potter, what do you actually know about predudice? Personally, I mean. Because I an drawing a blank on a time where YOU were persecuted because of something you believed in or because of who you were. Persecuted and nearly completely alone, I add. If I remember correctly, you may have had times when you were nearly alone, but you always, always had the support of somebody high up (Dumbledore) or a secret support group somewhere (Potterwatch radio show). So, really, what are you basing your judgement on?"
It was this line, "No. I don't see. The only people who do are you lot. The Slytherins. So sorry if I have difficulty believing the words of a sixteen-year-old who doesn't know true prejudice," that really made me angry and then prompted my outburst above. I have more of a similar nature and may comment them on other chapters at a later time.
Sorry about this being so long.
I have had a lot of feeling about this fic for a while and thought that at least some of them should be aired out.
Fantabulous job, my dear. Thank you for sticking with this and not abandoning it. My head might explode if you do.
Author's Response: I don't even know how to respond to this. I am so floored and honored by your response, I can't form words to even begin to address this review.
I can honestly tell you, though, I have been on the same emotional journey writing this. I have cried, and I have sat there fuming at the things that I am making these character do. Sometimes I have to bury my attachment to them in order to be able to continue with the plot.
Trust me, the Harry Issue is far from over. And the next chapter is in the queue! So look for that. Thank you so much for the simply amazing review.