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Review:APerkins says:
Greetings from the land down under, where I should have been in bed many many many hours ago but the idea of reviewing your story jsut took hold and I couldnt seeem to let go!

aaah. A light switches on in my tired brain. So the veil ISNT one way after all... I seee. that first chapter, I may have to re read it.


Anyway, back onto being over bearing. thankyou sooo much! that little bit made the story suddenly normal again. Nothing against grace, Im sure shes nice and all but she was beginning to creep me out. I am so glad that your "world" isnt that altered that the mauraders could jsut accept some creepy twin who wants to stroke one of them. It was nice to ahve them think it weird too.
Also, it was kinda hilarious to have her asking peter if he could teach her to be normal. and to have Peter just deadpan "Im an illegal animagus who runs with a werewolf - " ahh you know the bit im misquoting. It was great!
So i am slightly confused as to how long Grace has been at Hogwarts. she said the charm to depart from hogwarts that Albus had given her had already been useful. how? and when?
And how old is grace again? 16? and she calls dumbledore albus...

they are obviously not typical student-teacher relationship.

Kinda would love to see snape having a true love. I think that would e just beautiful.

And maybe she can introduce him to shampoo or somethign too?
lol

Anywy, the second half of the chapter's voyage into the completely foreign was well neough done that I didnt completely flounder. you took the time to explain enough about that world actually that I probably understand it better than I do the Wizarding side of things at the moment!
You're doign a great job, and it is much easier to read now that Im "into it"!

This is intriguing,and I will be back!
but for now, I should really sleep. zzzZz :)

Author's Response: THIS IS THE BEST PRESENT EVER!!!

It's like Christmas! :p

Yeah, the first couple of chapters were, and continue to be, troublesome. I've been some revisions that are in the queue that will hopefully make them less confusing and more readable...but they still need work :(.

Tehe, yes Grace is certainly a handful. Creepy is definitely a good descriptor :)! She will get a bit better as she learns what is and is not socially acceptable, I promise.

Oh my gosh! You made me laugh so hard, " creepy twin who wants to stroke one of them." Holy crows that was too funny :). Yes, I suppose that would also be a good way to describe what happened :p I just hadn't thought of it quite that way!

I'm glad you liked the Peter-Grace scene, that was fun to write.

Yes, Grace is 16. I've added that into some of the revisions as I've failed to mention it previously.

Grace has been at Hogwarts a few times before, as Albus has brought her there over a couple of Christmases. That will all be explained later, but she needed a way to move around and in and out of the castle undetected.

I am attempting to portray a father-daughter kind of relationship between Albus and Grace. He's really been the only father-figure that Grace has had in her life...but there will be some discussion on that later.

XD! Shampoo...there...you've made me laugh again. There will be some discussion of Snape's...hygiene...but not in the same way that James and Sirius approach it.

HOORAY!!! I did it right, then! That's good because the introduction to an alternate world had the potential to be extremely confusing :).

Thanks for stopping by!

-Rumpel


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