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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Hey there!

Okay, I must admit, I have been meaning to start reading this story for quite some time - pretty much ever since the first chapter came out - but I have just not had time for fanfiction until recently. And I still must get back to Diamonds into Coal which is just amazing!

Anyway, back to this story.

Wow, this first chapter was just amazing. I'm already hooked and wish I could just go ahead and read all the rest of the chapters right now, though unfortunately I have an exam tomorrow and haven't studied at all. Whoops.

I've personally never really had a problem with Ginny, apart from occasionally in the films and sometimes in fanfiction. But I think you wrote her really well! Her voice was excellent and the way you described this normalcy that is her life and how a part of her clearly feels frustrated with her life, like she's not doing enough. Obviously she has James and Albus, who she loves, but I think almost every housewife feels bored or frustrated at some stage - especially someone like Ginny who has had such an exciting life, to put it one way, and has had to retire from playing for the Holyhead Harpies.

The flow and balance of this chapter was great. I was honestly hooked the whole time and the balance between the darkness and mystery and the normalcy was great, really made me look forward to the next chapter.

I absolutely loved both the dream and the grocery store scene. As of yet, I'm not quite sure what to make of them, what they mean, but I want to find out more! You asked if there was anything you could do to make them creepier - I honestly thought they had just the right amount of creepy! Sorry, I know that's not very helpful, but this chapter was just so good!

Oh, and little James was very cute. Just saying!

Thanks for an awesome read! Definitely adding this to the favourites list!

Courtney:)

Author's Response: And I need to catch up on responding to your lovely Diamonds into Coal reviews! Sigh. I will soon, I promise. In the meantime, thanks for stopping by to check out another of my works!

I could definitely see Ginny developing some sort of restless housewife syndrome when she's cooped up after leading--and I like the way you put it--an exciting and chaotic life. She grew up watching her mother work constantly for her children and may not have been as enthusiastic as some young women when expecting her first child. Obviously she loves her boys, but still... it's probably not quite what she dreamed of.

It's great to hear that the dream and vision in the grocery store were sufficiently creepy! Keep me updated on the creep factor in coming chapters, because I keep trying to up the ante and challenge myself and I really want to get feedback on how I'm doing.

Thanks for your wonderful review, Courtney :)

-Amanda


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