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Review:toomanycurls says:
Just from looking at the characters and ships, I can tell this is going to be quite the interesting ride. I'm led to believe that Becky will end up writing about or reliving parts of these people's lives. That's quite an exciting prospect!!

I like that you open up with a lively scene without a ton of preamble. It's instantly engaging. I can totally relate with the feeling of not having anything cool to brag about with classmates - that's a lot of pressure especially after getting fired.

I love the idea of a Ravenclaw club but ex-Ravenclaw sounds like they all dropped out. "Beloved by Ravenclaw alumni" might fit better (I mean, my alumni associate doesn't call us ex-Huskies.) Though, that's a pretty minor thing.

You do a great job showing how well Liz knows Becky (and how close they are) by having her show up to make Becky leave and by bringing clothes for her to wear. She had Becky pegged as a possible no show.

It's quite interesting that Harry kicked Becky out. I'm quite curious why he did that (I mean, what what the action that got that snide/Snape-like comment from him?). I hope that gets mentioned in a future chapter.

I feel bad for Becky with her friends scrutinizing her career/non-career. Though, it does fit with what I'd expect Claws to do.

John the bartender - what's his game? I do think there was something special in that drink based on the dream she gets later on. I've never thought about wizards pursuiing muggle careers. That's quite the interesting notion!

I can relate to Becky loving a book character (but not for being devoted to one like she it)

I thought her dress was green? I might have mis-read that part though.

The dream sequence is quite intense. My gut reaction is that she's dreaming as Tonks trying to get to Remus. As I mentioned above, I think it had to do with the drink.

Saved by Liz! I'm so glad she didn't have to wade through that emotional bog alone.

This seems quite interesting so far!

-Rose

Author's Response: Hi :-)
Thank you for the lovely review.

I'm happy to hear it sounds interessting, because I was really worried about the first chapter. The story takes about three chapters to hit the core so, I'm glad the start is worth a read ^^

There will definitly be more about the Harry conflict later. Youre right. Its a very Snapelike comment, but it felt right in ther situation.
Overall it's always nice to know how others expect the story to turn and this definitly got me some thinking to do :-)

Thanks for the awesome review!

Love,
T.


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