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Review:Lululuna says:
Hi there, I'm back from review tag! :)

I liked this chapter a lot, and I think it flowed quite smoothly and helped clear up the prologue a little for me as it went back to the more familiar roots. I think you have some really intriguing, original ideas here: I like the idea of Grace having these magical powers, though it's really sad that she would have been completely separated from her family.

I thought the exchange with Grace and Anne at the beginning was really sweet, and her talking about bringing a toad was so cute and reminded me of other first years getting their letters, though she's a little older. I felt sorry for poor Anne being left behind, though it was so sweet for Grace to offer to turn her into an animal and bring her! I'm not sure what I think of this institution of theirs: it seems a little questionable and a bit of an isolated existence for the girls.

Maybe because she's been locked away from society for years, Grace comes across as both very knowing and very childlike. I laughed but felt a little sorry for her when she picked up the first year instead of asking the kid to move, and I feel like there are going to be more situations where she does the wrong thing because she's not used to being around people. She has that wide-eyed, trusting, innocent honesty quality to her which should make her a very interesting OC.

At the same time, her knowledge about her powers and how she has visions of people and knows the future kind of freaks me out. I can't imagine what it would be like to be burdened with all of that at such a young age.

I'm curious to find out more about her "job," and why she's been so distant from the Potters, and about her powers and links with werewolves and Remus. Also, it looks like from the prologue she had a kid with Snape, so I'm very curious to see how they would ever get together as they seem very different.

Well done! :)

Author's Response: Oh good, I'm glad it helped a bit. These first two chapters were tough and have been subject to many rewrites, poor things.

Grace needed to have somebody in her life before coming to Hogwarts, else I'm sure she would have lost her mind. Not that she's all that stable anyway, especially when it comes to social aptitude :p. I thought it might be a good idea to make Grace, well, graceless due to her disconnection.

Noctars houses many different people, so she was not exactly alone physically. But there's more on Noctars, the Potters, Graces' powers, and Remus later on. I kind of sprinkled the information through the story to avoid an overload of information. Although, there is already quite a bit of information to grasp as it stands.

The visions will play a large role in Grace's mental health but she'll have some friends to help her along :). Any sort of relationship established with Severus, even a friendship, is sure to be a bumpy road!

Thanks so much for reviewing!

-Rumpel


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