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Review:MrsKatieGrint says:
Hey there!
I totally meant to go back and review, but yesterday I had finally caught up on homework at a decent time, so was able to go to bed pretty early for once! haha so whoops!
But, its okay because I'm reading and reviewing now!:D

Okay, so I love the mention of Fred. A lot of stories just move on like NOBODIES BROTHER DIED AND IT MAKES ME MAD! haha they just completely ignore the fact that one of their family members died, you don't forget that easily or even at all I should say.
So, I love you for that.(;

Also, nice touch on an exhausted early father Ron. I think you portrayed him nicely, especially with a newborn in the house. Although, I feel as if he was a little cold(?) towards Ginny? I don't know. I know they weren't super close, and that he is tired from baby Rose, but I would've thought with Ginny married to Harry things between them would be a little better? I don't know, just a suggestion!
Also, again, I never would've thought to include the toll of the war on Hermione, but again, you portrayed her perfectly, almost making me think this is actually how Hermione would've been. I think this was a great aspect to include, whether it was just for Ginny's benefit so that she would have a reference for her own dreams, or not, but that was lovely, and definitely believable.
With the mood, I definitely got the seriousness vibe going on. I think that was right because of all that Hermione unloaded onto Ginny, as well as Ginny actually saying what was going on with her out loud. I understand that this is a darker story, therefore it will give off more serious/angsty vibes, and I think you're doing fabulous with that.
All in all, I think you did a great job of keeping the readers interested with the second chapter, unlike most stories who use the second chapter as filler. Again, I am dying for more, and I know there is going to be more to this problem than is let on now, and I can't wait to see it resolved.
Cheers again, to another beautiful chapter!
Katie

Author's Response: No worries, Katie, thanks!

Yeah, I don't think it would be easy for the Weasley family or anyone close to them to fill the void of Fred's death or forget him. It would be hard for me to imagine a post-war story that didn't at least mention Fred. I'm glad you liked my inclusion of him.

I guess I didn't convey the emotion properly in the scene with Ron. I definitely didn't mean for him to come across as cold toward Ginny; I'm sure they'd get along fine. What I meant to show is just what they've both been worn down by the war and there's a sense of emptiness there between them because of what they've lost--something that wouldn't exist between Ginny and someone who didn't know her pain, an outsider. Does that make sense? Maybe I need to clarify that more.

I'm happy to hear that you liked the mood and the interaction between Ginny and Hermione. I definitely wouldn't want my second chapter to feel like filler, and I'm glad it didn't seem that way to you. There's a lot left to happen before Ginny's struggles are resolved, but hopefully you enjoy watching the story unfold further :)

Thanks for your kind review!

-Amanda


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