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Review:800 words of heaven says:
Hello again! I am SO sorry for this incredibly late review request!

I really enjoyed this chapter! Possibly because Regulus is still my favourite, but mostly because you write really well. His characterisation is just so... ugh. It gives me feels - good one :)

You asked specifically about the Quidditch match, and I know what you mean about writing action scenes! I felt that the timing was a little off in that section. One minute, James had scored the first goal, and then Lily and Regulus were exchanging notes, and the next the score was so high. As usual, the description was fantastic, however!

My favourite part of this chapter though was how you wrote Sirius leaving home. Usually, it's such a huge thing, with this massive confrontation and shouting matches and almost illegal curses flying all over the place, finally culminating in Sirius storming out. I really liked how you wrote it so much quieter. It felt far more personal and real that way - especially because as readers, we saw it through Regulus' eyes. There's so much between the two brothers that just goes unsaid, and the tension that this causes was really evident in that scene. It was really well done, I thought.

I say this every time, but your writing is just so fantabulous that it bears repeating every time - awesome stuff!

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for coming by! I always look forward to hearing from you :)

Yeah, I'm still not totally confident in my Quidditch-writing skills. Maybe one day I'll convince myself to write a true action story and push myself to improve there. I'm glad the imagery worked well, though!

I've written Sirius leaving several ways, both in fic and just in my head, and I think this is my favorite, with him packing his things and refusing to give his little brother the pleasure of a farewell. I think their relationship is so interesting and this moment between them makes me so sad, even after having read and re-read it previously. I'm very pleased to hear that the emotion was tangible and that overall this chapter was "awesome stuff!" Haha :)

Thanks so much! I'm off to re-request!

-Amanda


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