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Review:marauderfan says:
Hello, here with your review!

This is absolutely your best chapter so far. What a creepy, illuminating view into Voldemort's mind! I think you wrote him so well - and what a difficult character to write! This line: It was spectacularly gruesome and beautiful. Voldemort made a note to pair the two of them again.
So twisted. But I like the way you wrote how he thinks, it seemed very in character! Voldemort would find that beautiful, wouldn't he.

So, when I first clicked on this chapter and saw that it was about Voldemort, I was really excited because that's not often something I read about - Voldemort being afraid. I thought it would focus on his fear of death. And it seemed to be more about uncertainty than death, which surprised me. What I really liked was this:
Fear was death and he had expertly removed that risk from his existence.

This is great. He is so arrogant, so convinced that he cannot be brought down, that at least consciously he is not afraid of death anymore because he thinks he has conquered it. And that leads into the quote from the Litany Against Fear in the beginning - that's PERFECT for ole' Voldy. That line suits so well because it's like at the moment he tries the curse on Harry, he has like a little flash of that buried fear returning just as he dies (well, not dies. Whatever they called it when he vanished the first time) I'm starting to ramble but anyway really great job tying those together and I like the way you approached Voldemort's "fear" of death.

I have only minor CC for this. Voldemort discusses the Potters and refers to them as his greatest threat, but then later he's considering which boy to kill. Earlier it sounded as if he had already decided on Harry, so is he starting to change his mind? It was a little unclear to me why he flip flopped there. Also, there's a small typo: "populous" should be "populace".

But that aside. This must have been a challenge to write, Voldemort's mind is a really crazy place, lol. And you did an amazing job! Bravo for taking on Voldy as a main character.

Author's Response: I might be the most proud of this chapter so it means a lot for you to say it's the best so far. I was slightly creeped out by how easy Voldemort came to me. O.o I did think Voldy would see the deaths done on his command as bits of art that he directed (like a movie director). I'm on the fence about the fear for Voldemort. I'm not sure if it's a fear of death or a fear of fear. I meant to straddle both.

The ending was meant to be the tie-in to the quote at the beginning - I'm really glad you saw how it connected through.

Ah! I do need to better explain that line of though. I meant to have both families be a threat and the Potters be selected because he got information about them first. Or (and this is me just explaining away my unclear plot) Voldemort was leaning towards the Potters being a bigger threat but wasn't completely sold on that idea. (That's just what I'll tell myself I meant until I go back and edit that)

Your review has meant so much to me! Thank you so much for such a detailed and incredibly awesome review!


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