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Review:Rumpelstiltskin says:
Hello!

I can't resist myself, I must tear apart the first paragraph because it is fantastic. First of all, the imagery was lovely. Tied into that is your beautiful use of personification that really set the tone and mood of the chapter. Then there was a quick deduction of what "emotion" the thunder held. And this line- "Was Mother Nature angry that I was so much better at brooding than she?" Holy crows! I'm at a loss for words at all of this. I've been quite hung up on this paragraph for a while now and all I can think to say is: Genius!

Imogen's reaction to Arian's violent response to his visions was very realistic. The details provided were lovely, acting as perfect descriptions in a scene filled with movement.

The line "he's also one sandwich short of a picnic" was fabulous. I've heard many similar sayings alluding to one's mental stability, but never that one. It cracked me up :).

I also found Draco's slight annoyance at the idea of (for lack of a better term) babysitting Arian quite funny.

In this chapter I particularly liked the way you kept referring to the storm in order to reflect the interpersonal turmoil occurring in the plot. It was a perfect use of symbolism, if you ask me.

My Rowling...there is so much that I can comment on in this chapter! It has to be my favorite so far. It gets gold stars! YOU get gold stars! Even Draco and Imogen get gold stars!

Anyway...

My favorite part was Draco's rationalization of good versus bad. I had this very discussion in one of my theory classes last year. It turned out to be a very heated, opinionated debate that lasted the entire block. Not once did anybody mention love as a factor. It was a brilliant component in the good v. bad dynamic that I had never considered before. Now you've got Rumpel thinking. :D

The way the story is moving along is quite lovely. It's like being taken step-by-step though an adventure. You also always leave me yearning for more, the anticipation is really gripping.

I cannot wait for more, although I realize that in this time of the year I will have to wait a bit. That is okay, though, I am a patient Rumpel!

Until next time,
-Rumpel

Author's Response: Ah RUMPEL!! I look forward to your reviews like I do Christmas...or maybe even pancake day :p

OK, my weirdness aside, I have to tell you that I am so so so so so completely overwhelmed and touched by that wonderful comment about the first paragraph. I really did not expect it and I am over the moon and smiley because of how much you liked it and the lovely praise! It sure is nice to read such a nice review when I am tearing my hair about an exam that is a day and a half away.

Anyway, I tried to make Arian's vision scene as active and realistic as possible and I solemnly swear I didn't intend to have Imogen standing there like a dumb vegetable but hey, it's her first time seeing something like that. I don't blame her for being slow :p

The whole good VS bad thing was something I hoped would someone how clear the readers and to some point, my own confusion about Draco's character because I always feel as though I NEED to include more information about him. That is why a huge chunk of this chapter was written from his view. He is after all a main character and I think his POV was necessary to get him as detailed as one.

As far as debates go, if your class ever have one again, you know what to do! *cheesy smirk*

Seriously, I cannot thank you enough for this wonderful review and I promise that as soon as this hectic week is up, I will post chapter 10 in the queue. It is so tempting tpo write as the queue is so small lately but ugh, I must resist.

Thank you so much again and I hope you stick with Imogen and Draco :)


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