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Review:APerkins says:
Hey Rumpel!
Review Tag!! I am kinda excited by this next chapter, it kind of explained a few things, but now I have to ask... is this a cross over?
If not, this is a really new and exciting look and things. I think I could get to like AU a little!
And I assume its AU - cause Im sure the marauders weren't animagi in first year - and I think this entire chapter was mainly set on the first day wasnt it?


Oooh but poor Grace, how do you be nice to someone who isnt a cowardly rat...
And how does Grace know so much about everto trucido? Gretchen? Do we hear more from her? I hope all these things are revealed piece by piece, my curiosity is aroused!

I noticed a typo that slipped through - my best friend from the institute - says 'by best friend"
Speaking of graces best friend, do I get to meet her again? What type of institution houses a demon slayer and a werewolf. Did they know what they held?

I have to say ,I found the crude language off-putting, especially for an 11 year old. I presume she is if she has just been sorted? But then I was a little confused by the fact that she was lifting first years out of the way. Does she have superhuman strength along with future telling abilities, and an affinity for werewolves?
I think the first paragraph made her youth clear - her language was 'young' but it seemed to switch from young to late teens type language and attitude. Which is why I guess I am so curious about all the age things :)


Im finding this fascinating. If it is a cross over, it is well done, and if it is your own imagination, I am impressed at how well thought out the 'world' seems to be - even though you havent revealed it all and have just left me with more questions than ever! It will by so interesting to see how this all comes together!

Well done!

Author's Response: Athena!

I have missed our little review-related conversations!

Nope, not a crossover. I'm not big into other fandoms, but I did get a bit of inspiration from the Tale of the Three Brothers (with Death and the hallows and whatnot).

It is an Au, but it seems that somewhere in this current rewrite I excluded some critical details. Sorry, these first two chapters have given me the worst time! It seems that every time they are rewritten I lose or am missing something :(.

Some things you should know that Rumpel stupidly left out:
1-Grace is 16
2-The majority of the chapter takes place on the first day of Hogwarts of the marauders (and Grace's) 6th year
3-Grace had to finish Noctars before attending Hogwarts, but I can't tell you why yet :)

Although Grace's age explains some of the language I know I overdid it! It gets toned down a bit in future chapters and I need to cut it back severely in this one.

Oops, thanks for the typo too :)!

Ah, yes. Many questions will be answered later on. You'll hear more about Gretchen and eventually meet Anne. Noctars is the type of institution that houses a demon slayer and a werewolf :D! But you'll have to wait on that too.

Thanks for dropping by!
-Rumpel


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