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Review:toomanycurls says:
This chapter is quite interesting!! The contrast between the beginning and end of the chapter is quite noticable. At the start I felt that the balance of power in Imogen and Draco's relationship was swayed towards Draco. In the end, when Imogen and Draco are with people who know and love her, I feel as if Imogen will be able to assert herself as more of an equal rather than the person Draco is babysitting.

I got a good laugh at the walking in on Draco bit. Knocking should be a universal rule though - you never know when people don't have their pants on!

Imogen's descriptions of Draco this chapter seem less positive than they have been preivously (she seemed to be slightly warming up to him preivously and now she's quite critical and negative about him).

Draco's reaction to Arian was really cute. He seemed a bit jealous to me. ;) Can't stand Imogen knowing other guys I guess. Imogen's reaction to "where's your friend" and having to hink that they meant Draco was funny. It emphasizes the idea that they're in the mindset of the other being a resource rather than an ally.

You wrote Imogen's internal conflict at the end really well. I can imagine she felt as if she's putting the only people left to her in danger but is struggling to follow through on her mother's dying wish!

I haven't noticed this in the past few chapters, but it seemed like this chapter had quite a few more typos/word misuse than others. There were a few your/you're mistakes and an acquire/inquire switch. Just thought I'd mention that.

You do a great job slowly adding complexity to the story in a way that makes it not overwhelming for the reader and not too slow either.

-Rose

Author's Response: Oooo, thank you for yet another lovely review :)

I've decided that by the time chapter twelve rolls around, I hope to have more solid ground when it comes to character relationships so chapter 7 in particular was just me setting the scene I guess.

I am glad you found humor in it though! Everybody loves a little laugh here and there :) And maybe Draco was jealous, I doubt he is the kind of person that takes kindly to any potential competition of any sort I guess!

Thank you once again for a lovely lovely review!

Bella x


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