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Review:silverashes says:
Hello!

*blushes* I'm so embarrassed at how long it took me to get your review finished! I'm awfully sorry. October put me into over drive, and I had a hard time escaping my school work. I wasn't ignoring you; I promise! Apologies aside let's get down to the real reason I'm here: your story!

So I'll start from the beginning. I was immediately intrigued by the first couple paragraphs, especially the first. I think you characterized the narrator very well. She's was a Sally Sue...I think I totally messed that name up. OH gosh, sorry. A Mary Sue! She wasn't a Mary Sue! I loved the fact that you made her love with Remus gradual. She didn't fall head over heals immediately after they met the first time.

I also love the way you've characterized the Order in general. They come across as a clique (for lack of a better word), and honestly I think that's the most accurate description of their group that I've ever read. I can only imagine how difficult it must be to become included into that group! I would be terrified. All of the characters in the chapter have been portrayed perfectly! They seem so real that sometimes I think they might jump out of my computer screen!

I think you've done a lovely job! The story holds a lot of interest! Keep up the good work!

xx Rachel

Author's Response: Hi Rachel!!

I'm terribly behind on my review queue too - so I tend to give people a huge amount of liberty when it comes to timing of reviews. :D

It's so great that Tonks doesn't come across as a Mary Sue! I tried to make her well rounded, imperfect, and quite genuine. I put her through a slow burn with Remus just because it didn't make sense for them to have a year of happy bliss by the time HBP rolled around but I wanted them to have a year of stuff (flirting, love, etc.) - just not bliss.

It means a lot to me that you liked how the Order came across here. I recently edited this chapter a lot - and the Order characterization was one of the key items I changed.

Thank you so much for such a detailed and helpful review!! I greatly appreciate all your feedback. :D

-Rose


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