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Review:toomanycurls says:
With all the lovely reviews you've given me, I've been wanting to check out your stuff for a while. I'm glad I caught you on the review tag!! I'm excited by the premise of this story. I don't usually dig AU but I feel you could pull it off well. :) So, I kind of review as I read - it will be a bit like getting my written instant feedback. :D

I like that you jump right into the thick of things. One thing that I was wondering - Does Kingsley have an accent? If so what kind is it? In the books he's not described having one but there could be an agrument that there's one there (with his deep heavy voice).

I really love how you've built up tension and dropped in hints about the plot arch and drama that the story will address. The first thing that popped to my mind was "ah, who are the formerly dead people?" not in a plot hole way but I'm excited to find out. Oh my. Having Albus there on her side is huge.

Having Grace make a deal with Death is genius. Did she trade one of the deathly hallows? This is turning into an increasingly interesting plot.

How did Grace get to be so powerful? I mean, the knowledge and apparant skill she has at memory probing and modification suggests prodigious skill. The list of people she brought back is making me so very happy. :D

I don't even know how to comment on the last portion of this chapter. It's so captivating and mind boggling. I think you've done a great job setting up the story and laying an awesome hook. There are a lot of questions open at this point but I expect you'll address them as the story progresses. In terms of length - I think this is a pretty good lenth. I mean, less than 2k words isn't a huge investment for a reader to see if a story is interesting. A 3-4k first chapter is a bit daunting (what if the story blows and you have to read a lot to find out?) - anyway, this length lets you showcase your interesting plot and writing prowess.

-Rose

Author's Response: o.o

Omigosh! Youaren'tsupposedtobereadingmyfanfiction! o.o

Breathe Rumpel.

Hi. Welcome to Rumpel's story, I hope you don't get lost.

Anyways.

Well, they all have accents to me :p, but that wasn't exactly what I meant. I was trying to describe the change in voice that is accompanied with surprise and disbelief. Now that I think about it, perhaps my word choice wasn't the best there.

Albus is always good to have on your side! :)

Ah Death! I can't tell you what the deal was...it is a surprise! Some of the questions get addressed later in the story, like Grace's abilities and such.

Ah, good. I'm glad you like the length. In the very first version, many rewrites ago, this chapter was over 3k and utterly confusing. I'm still working on this chapter, it needs some final touches.

I was happy (and a bit frightened) to see that you stopped by. So thank you! :)

-Rumpel


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