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Review:GingeredTea says:
Alright, I admit that I am still somewhat confused as I begin to read this chapter. I think I'm still on information overload. lol

When you open the chapter it's clear we're being introduced to two eleven year olds, but then, when you put this in "Grace, however, had a special bond with werewolves. She was an Everto Trucido, a demon slayer." Is this something she was born as or some power or exceptional talent she picked up on/learned/grew into, etc? Did I miss mention of this in the earlier chapter (information overload might have gotten the best of me). Anyway, it just threw me a bit, because Grace's dialogue seemed to be true to an 11 year old, but maybe not her powers.

Okay, so has she received special training beforehand? I'm so confused. If these are silly question just know I'll probably be re-reading your first chapter a couple times.

Your character lives in a disturbing institution...I need to read more. I already feel like you need a dictionary or something about all these places and events.

Okay, so Grace is eleven, right? She is entering with Remus and James and Sirius? If so, why does she get announced and singled out as a transfer student?

She ISN'T 11, I'm guessing. I think it would be way less confusing if that were at the top. Calling Grace "young" coupled with the letter confused me. Now I feel more righted. :)

I liked your descriptions in this chapter and it wouldn't be Harry's father if he didn't sneak into the Hospital room. My favorite part however, was her picking up the first year and the awkwardness with McGonagall.

Author's Response: Oops. I'm sorry for all of the confusion. Grace is sixteen in this chapter. I didn't explain that very well did I? -_- Silly Rumpel.

Some of your questions will be answered through story progression. Being a Trucido is innate, but there's more detail later on. More information about Noctars will be revealed over time, too.

There is just so much information (and more to come) that this all gets confusing sometimes from the readers end. Also, the first couple of chapters have been revised so many times that I forget what information that I've ended up losing (like Grace's age).

That's why I love feedback. It lets me know what I need to fix :). So, thank you!

-Rumpel


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