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Review:Courtney Dark says:

How has that only just clicked now? The moment you mentioned her sister Daphne I was like oh! Duh! I apologize (for some reason it took my about five attempts to spell that word - and in the end I had to use that spell-checkery thingie - sorry, not important! I'm waffling on about nothing again!) for my idioticness.

I enjoyed this chapter, although there were a few distracting typos, especially near the beginning, though those can be easily fixed:) I really, really love your characterization of the Slytherins. I haven't read that many fanfics from the point of view of Slytherins, but I think a trap many authors fall into is making their characters too nice. While I already like and feel connected to many of your characters, they definitely have an air of darkness about them - I especially like how we see Tor's thoughts about Voldemort, which are definitely more positive than someone from Gryffindor's might me.

I am so intrigued to find out what's going to happen next now, because in your summary you said that Tor is in love with a muggleborn, yet she ends up with Draco! Hmmm...I wonder how that comes about?

Anyway, this was a fun chapter, nice work!


Author's Response: Yay, you came back! :)

Haha, don't worry, you're supposed to be surprised. :) I changed Astoria's story and parents and last name around a little for fun, and it tends to confuse people at first. :P I wanted to give her a character besides just being Draco's future wife so we get to know her on her own first... plus Astoria is kind of a mouthful! :P

I don't blame you, apologize is an awkward word (and I just spelt awkward and word wrong in first go...why?!)

I'm glad you liked the chapter and the Slytherins! I think you're right about how they're often portrayed as quite nice, and these ones, though they have their good moments, also have some real corruption and darkness in their characters. I love writing from Tor's POV, and especially when she's very brainwashed at the beginning of the story. It's entertaining to revisit it through reviews on the early chapters and remember how cold she was!

I'm glad you liked it and hopefully you'll make it back sometime soon! :) Thanks so much for this awesome review!

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