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Review:marauderfan says:
Well hello there! I'm here with your requested review, and sorry about the long delay in getting to it! Please forgive me? I have cookies! *sends pumpkin cookies or some other Halloween/autumn themed baked goods*

I was so glad to see the two of them finally get out of the house and have interesting adventures... picking up the pace(s)? :p Sorry, bad pun. Anyway, the change in pace was nice and I enjoyed the little snippet of back story about Ana's goblin friend.. maybe friend is too loose a term, more like informant. Acquaintance. Anyway, that was a great scene.

I also liked when Ana started correcting Burke about his incorrect dragon skeleton, haha. That part when Draco and Ana went to Knockturn Alley even further supports my theory that the war had no effect at all on Ana, or else she'd have realised where she was, or at least had some sort of prior feeling about Knockturn Alley, given its shady past and reputation. But for her, it's just an alley like all the rest. So that was an interesting side to see.

Also... punching Draco. I loved it, mainly because I'd have enjoyed doing that as well, I always thought Draco could have used some more punching in the books. So, go Ana! But I have to admit I felt bad for him, because he didn't really do anything wrong here. Ana's going a bit crazy! But I think her breaking down in front of Draco might lead to them talking/connecting more. and some more information about Ana's mystery past. :D

I should probably have some CC for you, but I don't. I think this chapter was miles ahead of some of the earlier ones, mainly because the plot is starting to advance and I think your writing has improved a lot since your early chapters! :) Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you! And it's fine, the wait wasn't too bad :P

I'm really glad that you enjoyed the chapter. I think this is where I finally started realizing what I was writing and then actually mapped out to my plot and everything that would lead up to it, because when I started this I didn't know what kind of daunting task it would be :P You know, first story ever written outside of school, you know? I had no idea the power of outlining and planning, etc.

Thank you very much for reviewing! I'm glad to have gotten your feedback :)

--Monica


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