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Review:marauderfan says:
Hello, I'm here with your requested review! Sorry about the long delay. I got stuck in a vortex of time travel and ended up in the future where I was turned into a robot and my fingers got replaced with lasers, and then I couldn't type reviews! True story! (But actually, sorry I took so long to r/r.)

I liked the interactions between Grace and the other characters in this chapter. It seems people are warming up to her despite her social ineptitude, which is nice. I'm actually surprised at how well she's fitting in with everyone after only two days - she hasn't had any bad experiences at all with being the "new kid", except for Snape sneering at her. She seems to make friends quite easily! Besides that, I'd love to know more about Grace's impressions of Hogwarts as she gets used to it. Does she ever get lost? Does she forget people's names? How does Hogwarts compare to Noctars, in Grace's mind?

I'd also like to see more James and Grace screen time together. They are siblings but haven't had much time to talk one on one in the story so far, and I think if I had a twin I'd never known about until I was 16, I'd like to get to know them! :p

I'm really curious about that charm bracelet too, and how it works, since Apparition and Portkeys aren't supposed to work inside Hogwarts. Maybe the Hogwarts anti-apparition charm doesn't cover magic from other portal-worlds? Hmmm. I'm excited to find out more about it. Ooh and Grace's wandless magic. How did other people in the class react to that? I think that'd be a good thing to include as well - as far as I know, wandless magic is pretty much unheard of, as the professor explained to her.

Great chapter overall! I have to say you are very good at pacing, your plot seems well planned out and each chapter adds in a little more mystery. Nice job!

Author's Response: Oh, yes, I hate it when that happens. But really, I never mind waiting and I've been pretty busy myself. (I've actually been meaning to swing by "The Brave at Heart" to check that out so expect some Rumpleness at some point.)

So far, she's fitting in decently. This has a bit to do with being James' sister (we will get into that later) and the girls who share the dorm with her are just being friendly to the new person for now :). There will be character conflicts so don't worry, not everybody will always get along (that could make for a very boring story!)

I actually hadn't considered giving Grace's opinions (and etc.) about Hogwarts and whatnot. I guess I've been wrapped up in the plot and failed to include some minor details. And small details are very important! Thanks for that. I had forgotten them!

I do have to go back and edit some Grace/James scenes as I needed to figure out James' characterization. But you might be happy to know that nearly all of chapter seven is dedicated to Grace and James.

The charm that Dumbledore made for Grace is specifically designed to get around the protective charms, but we will get into more details about that later :) (promise)!

Thank you for taking the time to review, you are always very helpful!


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