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Review:patronus_charm says:
I really should have done a rolling review because there were so many amazing parts to this chapter I want to comment but all my mind wants to talk about is the last one. Oh well, I'll try.

The way you carried the suspense on from the previous chapter over who was holding onto Helen's neck was really fantastic and kept me on tenterhooks. I'm so glad that you kept the tension up though because its always such an anti-climax to find out straight away.

The transition between that sort of tension and the romantic one which followed between Cadogan and Helen was really superb and kept me gripped to my seat. That scene was done really well and raised an interesting point about Helen. At times she appeared very moral with her disgust when she noted Cadogan was married but even though she dwelled on it here she still slept with him. My only theory is that she misses wizard company so much she had to forgo her morals to be with one.

The devil book was when the alarm bells started to ring in my head, because even though Helen sort of liked him at this point I certainly didn't. I just wish I knew why he has it now, there must be a reason to it which is connected to his death.

I can definitely see why this was nominated (and won if I'm correct) the best cliff hanger with Cadogan being like that. I just can't think who or why. My only idea is that it was Moody so he could get rid of a rival of Helen's though that's a tad extreme. I have a feeling it was a wizard though with the wand being drawn. I can't wait to read on now!

A brilliant chapter!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Oh good! I'm glad to hear that the shift from suspense to romance (if you can even call it that) was smooth. The image of the hands in the mirror was really striking for me, but the transition into a love scene was more of a challenge. Calling it romantic doesn't really suit because it's lust that brings them together, an attraction without much else. She wants a connection with another magical being - in a way she wants to be reminded of the kind of life she left behind. She's more disgusted by him and his inability to be up-front about himself, his failed marriage, and his magical status. But she does it because she wants it, for herself and herself alone. I don't know if that makes sense. It's strange to write a scene like this because, while it's common in spy and mystery stories for male characters, it's much harder to find precedent for female characters.

The book reveals who he actually is - his job, his identity, everything. That comes up again in a later chapter.

You thought was Moody! I'm sitting here like :O because that's so crazy awesome I don't even know what to say. That would be a good one - I never thought of taking the old love triangle to that extreme. But it would have been quite an interesting way of developing the plot. ;)

Thank you again for reading and reviewing!


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