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Review:APerkins says:
I forgot to mention in teh last review exactly home much I loved the first section of that last chapter - I think it is your best style of writing - the dialogue and the action and everything kinda happening together.
Draco, Ron, Hermione and Astoria discussing everything. It is easy to read, fast paced, intriguing, and clever. I just really really liked it.
Also, the vipers kiss is a great idea.

Anyway, thats for the last chapter, and this is meant to be about the current chapter.

And again the beginning of this chapter - the same thing again.
I liked the interaction between tenabra and the minister - its the type of writing you do so well that i am trying to mimic :)

ahh but then we moved to harry and neville. I like the concept of neville slapping harry out of his funk, I do. And I liek where the scene ended up. But I didn't realise Harry was actually in a funk?!
So Neville going off at him kinda came out of nowhere - I didnt understand what Neville thought Harry had gone wrong.
Anywa,y one they started arguing - yet again your mastery over dialogue was brilliant and the chapter was great.

And it was the same thing with Octavia hearing her voices. You just write that type of back and forth so well. There is enough descriptionto paint the picture and the whole thing just.. aww. it makes me happy to read good writing.

Anyway , I should be.. oh I dunno.. sleeping .. or working or preparing, or doing a million other things, but there are only a few chapters to go!!!
(Also, yay on 950 reviews!)

Author's Response: Hi, there! Thank you for the huge part you've played in getting CoB over the 950 review mark!

I get an odd little kick out of writing Ron and Draco together in the same conversation. Whereas there's a sort of grudging respect between Harry and Draco, Ron hates Draco with a passion and Draco finds Ron almost beneath his contempt. Makes for some good dialog.

Lady Tenabra finally disposes of the tool she's used to claw her way to the top in this chapter. She's moved on to Percy. I'm really glad that you think my writing is worth trying to mimic. Makes me happy!

I felt like Harry was in a deep, deep funk by the end of the last chapter. He's incapable of not feeling responsible for all the deaths and injuries that are happening around him. He feels as though he should just give himself up to Lady Tenabra before anyone else gets hurt. Neville is there to help snap him out of that frame of mind.

You're putting a huge smile on my face with all of your kind words. As it turns out, today was a day where that was appreciated even more than normal. Thank you!


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