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Review:Lululuna says:
Hi again! :) The line about Claudine being a survivor was great. I actually felt quite worried for the men whose van she jumped into and worried she would attack them, but I guess that's just one of the casualties of living in a city where there are vampires. I'm curious to find out what "crimes" Claudine has committed in terms of the Ministries, and why she's even more hunted than other vampires.

I like Jeremiah and his backstory a lot, though I suspect there's more to come. He seems like a really controlled, and compassionate (for a vampire) person who has a lot of wisdom to offer. I like how his speech sounds more formal as well, it fits with the idea that he's old. And again, the vampire politics are very interesting! The vampire history is really intriguing as well, like how Muggles and wizards used to hunt them. I can't wait to find out more about vampire lore as the story goes on. :)

I quite like the multiple perspectives in the chapter, and each character seems unique enough that it won't get confusing. Alexis seems like a great character, and I love the Longbottom connection.

I love the flashback! I'm curious to find out what is going on with Jeremiah's eyes, and who the beaux morts are. It's also exciting to learn how Claudine became a vampire and her connections to the wizarding world. Anyway this was another really great chapter- onto the next one now! :)

Author's Response: Hi again! Yes, Claudine is indeed a survivor - that's why she's smart with who she kills. Those men were in broad daylight, and killing them would have resulted in having to step forward into the sunlight /and/ their van wouldn't be a safe haven with police and SOCOs walking around. Her "crimes" will one day be revealed ;) As for why she's more hunted, it's because she's survived when many others haven't.

Jeremiah definitely has more of his backstory to come! His qualities stem from the years he's lived, and I'm really pleased you like the vampire politics! More will come, and it'll get even messier ;) I'm glad that you're intrigued about finding out more about them as the story progresses!

E yes the flashback! I had so much fun writing it that there'll be more flashbacks in Bite Club! The Beautiful Dead are explained in future chapters, and OOOH. Clever you, picking up on that little hint ;)


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