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Review:patronus_charm says:
I really enjoyed reading Helen's thoughts on magic because in a way one can compare to it how money is viewe in our world and it was really interesting to speculate how her life could have been different with it. Then there's the ponderings over how she manages to disguise her magic skill well whether others such as Cadogan or Moody are also hiding their magical ability.

You managed to describe Helen's feeling of illness really interesting with new descriptive techniques. This probably sounds odd but I get bored of the same ways of them saying they felt sick.

Again, you've really shown your skill at characterisation with Emile Cadogan. The tea he gave Helen is most probably suspect though that could just be me. Then the way she dreamt about him and all the warning messages reappearing. A great use of foreshadowing unless you're bluffing us. Hmm, I'll wait and see.

I just love your level of accuracy in this story whether it be linguistically with the use of German, or geographically and a the points in Egypt and then historically with the proprietary of Helen and how she portrays herself to others. Just all of this adds so much to the fantastic plot and makes it even better.

Wow so much happened at the end of that chapter! There was that tangible tension between Emile and Helen and I really thought something was going to happen there. Then the shock of him being a wizard was done really well and if he is related to Sir Cadogan that would make me insanely happy though I can't believe I didn't make the link before. Then the cliff hanger! That was excellent and I can't wait to read on :D

-Kiana

Author's Response: The idea of having always lived with magic is probably one of the reasons why I like writing Harry Potter fanfiction - the magic/Muggle divide creates a fascinating dynamic, forcing characters to step back and really think about what it means to possess magic. What must it be like for a witch or wizard when out in the Muggle world? There are so many rules and regulations about magical use that it seems to be more of a hindrance than a help, which is I suppose why so many purebloods isolate themselves completely from all things Muggle.

Helen does legitimately get sick from the boat - she just can't handle the water. But there is something else going on with Cadogan. I don't think I described that aspect of it as well as I could, though I'll try to patch things up in a later chapter (if I ever get to that point, sigh). There's some complex magic going on behind the scenes, and even Cadogan isn't entirely in control of it.

Thank you for your wonderful compliments about the details of this story! I love details, and it means so much to see that readers like them too. ^_^

I think he is a descendant of Sir Cadogan - it's always easier to use names from the Potterverse when coming up with OCs - though it's a very distant relation. Sir Cadogan wouldn't be so shy and awkward when it comes to sexual tension. XD I'm pleased to hear that there was a tangible tension there - sexual tension is perhaps one of the most difficult things to write because it has to feel natural, not at all forced. And writing that kind of electricity between characters requires just the right kind of language and sentence structure, not to mention the right characters.

Thank you again for reading and reviewing! I do so enjoy your reviews. :D


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