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Review:Lululuna says:
Hi! I'm so glad you decided to include this- I remember reading the first chapter when it was just a one-shot and loving how creepy and exciting it was. Lucy is such a great character and I loved how you started this: with the contrasts between her kitchen and the blood, and the parts of her vampire life which have started to become routine and normal.

I love how Lucy doesn't play around or break it to Hugo slowly- she just informs him and I don't blame the poor guy for being upset in the slightest.

Just one thought: in the sentence "after visiting their Muggle grandparents" I was a bit confused about whose grandparents they were- for a moment I read it as Lucy and Hugo visiting their grandparents which wouldn't make sense, so you might want to change that pronoun. :)

What, Hugo is dating a vampire slayer?! That's an excellent plot twist. I like the vampire dynamics and underworld set up here, it's really interesting. Hugo seems like a good guy: it was very ironic when he started feeling guilty for accusing Lucy of killing him, when in fact that's exactly what happened.

Claudine seems pretty cold, especially how she would have left Sandra to die if she wasn't useful. Alexis seems intense! I wonder if she's Hugo's mentioned significant other, and if so how she will react to his new state!

This was a great and really exciting chapter, and I'm excited to get to know these characters even more. :)

Author's Response: Hi hi hi! Yes, Lucy is indeed fun to write, especially as she's young enough to remember what the human world felt like while old enough for the vampire habits to have taken root.

When in doubt, don't best around the bush :P Lucy probably wasn't sure about how to phrase the situation appropriately (I don't think anyone would be!) so she just came out with it outright.

I'll take a look at that, and see what I can do to edit it :)

Yep - Alexis is that vampire slayer! I'm really pleased that you like the vampire community, and I hope you continue to in future chapters! And yep - poor Hugo, and deceptive Lucy for lying!

Claudine /is/ old in relative terms - most vampires wouldn't have survived to approximately 250 years old if they'd risked their existences for everyone they met.

I'm glad you liked this chapter, thank you for reviewing! ♥


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