Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:toomanycurls says:
I'm always amused when a chapter is labeled as filler. ^_^ The filler chapters hardly seem that way to the reader - they just add background plot stuff.

I absolotely love your first line. It's so grabbing and makes the content instantly interesting. The idea of Imogen arguing with her mother in her head is quite eerie yet makes sense. Imogen's identity pondering is quite fascinating. So often people hear that they are just like their parents. There is a point where adults are just mimicking parents or other role models. After a period of time they form their own self of identity and truly become themselves (or let their identity take over).

You write banter quite well. The ease at which Draco both offers help and mocks is brilliant. One tiny thing - spattergroit has an r in it. I looked it up (not because of the spelling but I forgot what it was exactly). It's a bit amusing how Imogen get so set off by Draco's words but he's just as cool as ever when she gets upset with him. Why is sounding like Trelawney a compliment? She's a bit batty.

Oh man, you make apparation sound more excruciating than the books did. Which makes a lot of sense after the torture and deprivation she's been living through. Tiny nitpick though - why would Draco have heard how well Charlie Weasley did or didn't do in appartation? I mean, he barely remembered Percy's name (and they went to school at the same time). Charlie was graduated by the time he started. I get the whole Malfoys hate Weasleys feud but I don't think that'd lead to swapping botched apparation stories.

Malfoy's comment about being her prince charming cracked me up. I also think it revealed a bit of his feelings towards Imogen.

haha, I liked that Imogen finally touched a nerve with him! It definitely makes sense that he'd not enjoy being called Snape's pet (on so many levels).

You pick such good moments to end your chapters. I mean, ending with a bit of drama and flair is always nice. ^_^

Author's Response: *sqe* I love your reviews so I get rather excited whenever you agree to a review swap haha :)

I'm glad you like reading filler chapters because it's just as fun to write as they are to read. It really gives me the chance to throw in that well over due humour and dialogue I've been itching to include but it didn't really fit in well with the chapters before.
I also personally think that Imogen's identity and the fact that she always chooses to question it is something very important to the fic as a whole. I think the fact that she doesn't accept herself as something and always wants to dig deeper into her own background and personality is a really big catalyst for further plot twists. So I'm so happy that you liked her musings over who she really is compared to her mother.

As for banter, Ah I love writing banter even though it gets me a few tries to get It up to scratch. I think Draco, for me, Is quite a hard character to write banter for because one minute he can be quite brooding and moody and the other he's incredibly sarcastic and quite the little snot rag. I hope I did the whole banter side of things justice :p

As for the all the mistakes, thank you for letting me know and I'll make a list of them all and edit them in the chapter!

Thank you so much for that lovely review :)



Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

Examples:
  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 136
Submit Report: