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Review:LumosWeasley says:
Hey, it's me for the review swap!

First of all, I think this chapter is really good! It definitely sets the stage for the whole story, which is good. The description is very nice to read and I think you did a very good job with it. One thing I might change would be in "...itís hard to be in awe when itís your neck on the block I guess." by getting rid of the "I guess". It's just my opinion, but I think it might strengthen that paragraph ending by making it better. That's just my opinion though, so take any nit-picky things with a grain of salt. It's your story after all!:) The whole "flobberworms for brains" bit added a bit of humor, so that was good!

Overall, I think this is a great beginning to the story, I definitely want to read more!

If you ever want to do any more review swaps, just say so:)

-Lumos

Author's Response: Hi! :)

I'm very glad that you liked the chapter. I wrote so many drafts of it so I'm glad I picked this one.
I actually have the same opinion as you on that particular line, it's always seemed a bit dodgy to me and now I know that the 'I guess' does read a little out of place. Thank you for pointing that out!

Thank you so much for the lovely review! :)


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