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Review:patronus_charm says:
Ah, I really hope we get to the bottom of who Moody really is quickly because I can't stand not knowing for any longer. In this chapter, with his thoughts about Cadogan and what caused the rock to fall it seemed as if he had a purpose and was sent for a reason which didn't seem fitting with what he was before. Hmm, I'll guess I'll watch and wait with him.

I'm really beginning to love Helen and this chapter showed me exactly why with the way she's not afraid to take down Moody and is so self assured that she is the superior one. It just has this odd comedic element about it. But then you balance it out perfectly with softer moments such as her needing to have a bath and almost drop that mask she hides behind at times.

That was again echoed with all the moments of indecision she was forced to face such as whether she went with Cadogan or not or whether she could really trust him. All these layers you're building up around her are fantastic and they're making her an excellent multi faceted character.

Cadogan, oh Cadogan. I'm still not sure who's confusing me the most out of him and Moody. I love the air of suspense you're building up around him it's making him even more intriguing and his behaviour and unknown background is bending more towards the suspect side of things.

A brilliant chapter and I hope you can make sense of this garbled phone review!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Oh dear, you've reminded me how stretched out this first part of the plot is. I spent so much time deciding who all the characters should be and how to put the pieces of the story together - it's horrible. *hides* Moody is definitely more than he appears, and he slowly transforms the longer that he knows Helen, making it almost impossible to figure out what he's supposed to be. He starts out as an annoying tourist, but then seems to be a detective or agent of some sort. It's really not very different from Cadogan, who also begins as simple tourist, but becomes... something else.

This is probably the part of the story where I started to like Helen too. She's swept up in things outside of her control, yet she retains her self-assurance and strength, not letting anything get her down. Not for long at least. When faced with difficult decisions and situations, she manages to pull through and remain true to herself. It's wonderful to hear that you think her multi-faceted!

I'm glad that you mentioned the old comedic element. Haha, I was watching far too many screwball comedies while writing this, and it definitely influenced the way I've written Helen and Moody's relationship. ;)

Thank you again for reading and reviewing! ^_^


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