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Review:AlexFan says:
Well then, that is one giant family. Like seriously giant, I lost track of the majority of them (I got lost as soon as Fabian and Georgia were mentioned).

Okay, I'm pretty sure it's not the many characters themselves that confused me, it was the grandchildren and the great grandchildren. I've got no idea which character belongs in each category so a suggestion that I would make is perhaps include a list before the story telling where everyone belongs.

There was one part where you accidentally slipped up and wrote in first person point of view instead of third person and a few grammar errors here and there. They didn't really interrupt the flow of the story unless you were looking for them so they're not that big of a deal.

I thought this was incredibly sweet and sad, especially the part where George said goodbye to everyone. The jumper part where he put on both of them was especially sweet and sad.

His entire life and George still doesn't forget about his brother in anything that he does.

And I love how George just knew that he was going to go, it wasn't unexpected or anything like that, he just knew that his time had come to leave and he had prepared for it.

But anyway, good job on the story, it was really sweet yet sad.
~Grace

Author's Response: I know, haha I just think with the Weasley's being so big that some how even the next gen kids would follow it.

I think even I got a little lost at one point, although that is a really good idea!!

I hadn't noticed that actually so thank you for pointing that out :D

I love Fred and George and sometimes I think they're a little under loved and since the scene in Deathly Hallows where Harry went to Kings Cross it got me thinking, is there really a Kings Cross after you die and voila! Heres the story.

Thank you for the review and I'll be sure to revise the POV changes and grammar :)

-Potterfan310
Soph :D



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