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Review:toomanycurls says:
Hi! Doing a review tag. I picked this one because I wrote for the QTR challenge too. It's nice to see other people's entries.

I'm quite amazed at how much plot you got through in 500 words. You've elegantly weaved together so many interesting canon touch points with a quite scary interaction with the boggart in the desk. The tension Sirius felt at leaving home with his final curiosity about the desk made the boggart's image all the more dramatic.

I really love Walburga's perspective when she finds the desk drawer open. The fact that she noticed the priceless family heirloom was ajar before seeing that her eldest son had gone says so much about why the family element there was rotton.

I am impressed with how you managed to speak volumes in the smallest of sentences. I especially loved 'carefully planning his exit for most of his life, even before his Sorting cleanly split his branch away from the family tree.' That shows that Sirius didn't just get in some teenager spat with his parents and decide to haul out of there. It was a long and slow departure.

Really incredible job here!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked how I hearkened back to canon events and felt I did a good job showing that curiosity can be dangerous. I like your point about the clearly enduring notion of the Black family's dispute with Sirius, too, how his decision to leave wasn't quick and how things had clearly deteriorated between him and his mother.

Thanks so much for your kind review!

-Amanda


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