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Review:APerkins says:
Phh this chapter gave me a headache. Too many generations all in one scene. You mentioned scropios mother. Im not good at next gen, and I dont think you ever referred to her as name, so on my first read through, every time I saw the word mother, I thought of Rose, because the scene was about Hugo and Al.
Then I realised that it was actually scorpius using the word, and I couldnt work out why he was calling Rose mother and THEN I worked out...
Well, know I didnt.
Is astoria Scorpius's mother?
I wish I knew this stuff. Everyone else in HPFF does.
Not me.
Then you introduced Esma as teh petite blonde witch and I dont know why but that confused me too and THEN you added a second "Mum" figure, and I think my braincells pulled up their stumps, and marched out in protest, one by one.
Other than that section giving me a headache ( even on the second and third reading!)
the rest of the chapter was magnificent.

Author's Response: Hi!

Headache? Wait until you get to the part where you're seeing all four generations in a single scene. :p

So to clarify, Astoria is Draco's wife and Scorpius's mother, ergo Rose's mother-in-law and Octavia's grandmother. If you read enough Next Gen fan fic, it starts to sink in.

The funny thing is that when I first posted this chapter, I had Esme as "the petite brunette witch" and people jumped all over me because she was blond when she first appeared in The Setup. So many characters, it's hard to keep track.

Sorry about the headache. Future chapters should be a little more focused. Or at least name people better. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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