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Review:APerkins says:
Hmmm. darkest chapter so far? No i disagree. Watching Ron torturing people? That I found dark. This one? Yeah, Hermione is flirting with pure evil, Tenabra is planning witch-y stuff. But none of it gave me the chills like seeing Ron inflict pain and suffering on others. The most chilling part of this chapter is the line "there was nothing funny about ron ..."
Its true. Awesome line by the way.

Also, a high spirited toddler stealing wands from Ginny Weasley?? umm.. intriguing! Is this a really old grudge or something? (Because how old is Octavia? She cant be a toddler anymore can she if she is hexing other kids and getting into trouble and hating muggles and stuff can she?) Sothis has to be from a couple of years ago at least - and obviously before Ginny died.

Hmmm. My initial thought had been a high school grudge, but that would be way too long ago - there wouldnt be an Octavia, obviously.

One of your previous reviews said somethign along the lines of "edit edit edit."

I am taking your advice, and trying to improve my ability to wrte action through dialogue, and keep emotions real. I think my writing is improving already, just from having read and thought about yours.
Thankyou soo much, am loving this

Ohh.. Ps. Yes, Honda is predictive text slang for jobs. they have jobs. I have fat finger syndrome. :) Where all phones are too small to press anything less than three buttons at once :)


Author's Response: Hi!

A funny thing about author's notes is that you write them in about 2 minutes, tops, after you're already burned out and giddy from wrapping up a chapter. Sometimes they make sense in hindsight and sometimes they don't. This one, probably not my best work. ;) And there is nothing funny about Ron when he's angry and upset.

Octavia was only two when Ginny was killed. That was four years ago, so now she's six. As to what she was doing with Ginny's wand... well, that's all wrapped up in the story.

High school grudge isn't a terrible guess, but it's not correct, either.

Wow. That is pretty high praise. I'm really glad that you're able to take something like that away from my story. Makes me feel really proud. :)

OK, good. I was wondering what that Honda was all about.

Thanks so much for all of your feedback and compliments!

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