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Review:Lululuna says:
Hi again! :) I'm slowly but surely working through these!

The fragmented style of storytelling, where each chapter may jump forwards or backwards in time (like going from Rose and Albus at Hogwarts right to after their parents' deaths) is really interesting here. Especially since I've read ahead and know a little more has been revealed, it just reminds me how the mysteries build up and how complicated the plot it, it's quite brilliant! I'm still very curious about this war and how it actually came about, but it's very effective to learn how Albus and Rose were first as teenagers and kids, since it creates the building blocks for who they will become.

Hugo is one of my favourite characters in this story- he just seems so intrinsically good, and brings out the best in Rose. It was great getting to see them banter and Hugo be embarrassed by his sister being all affectionate. It's very sad that Ginny and her kids unravel after Harry's death, and understandable, but also a little upsetting that Ginny couldn't be stronger for her kids and for Rose and Hugo.

Something I really loved was the physical description of Hugo- it was really vivid. :)

I'm suspicious about Albus giving Scorpius his "permission"- it seems like he might have ulterior motives (doesn't he always?) and it's also like he's talking about Rose as his property. Scorp is a great character though, and I like the foil he presents against Albus. :)

Poor Rose, having to deal with that dreadful training! I'm sure it does pay off in the long run, but I felt so sorry for her. It was interesting when the Head had a moment of almost feeling sorry for her, and where she reminded herself not to think of him as a father figure- I can see how if he was one of the only figures in her life, she might form that kind of attachment despite how cruel he can be to her. It did well at giving him a little more depth.

I thought Hugo asking Rose if she could do something about their parents using the resurrection spell was a good point, and her denial and explanation that nobody could do it again was intriguing. This was another brilliant chapter- long, yes, but I think necessarily so. Good job! :)

Author's Response: Hey there! I'm so ridiculously slow at replying to your awesome reviews gahh...

Definitely thrilled you like Hugo, he's so often neglected in stories in favor of Rose but its really his intrinsic goodness that makes her , for lack of a better word, good. I'm glad that he's believable in that aspect. Agreed, it's upsetting about Ginny -- I keep forgetting you've already read ahead so you know how it goes -- but even so I doubt she could help them even if she wasn't depressed.

Yes, Albus is always up to something ;). Scorpius hasn't got a clue at the moment haha. Though he is probably suspicious of this 'permission', he probably doesn't give it much thought.

POOR ROSE. That really should've been the title. "POOR ROSE, featuring horrible bosses and morally ambiguous cousins." I feel bad for being so horrible to her but then I keep doing it haha.

Glad you picked up on that moment between her and the Head. I practically snuck it in, but that element of 'attachment' paves the way for future developments.

And you picked up on the bit about the resurrection spell. Serious foreshadowing there. It's going to play a very important part in the main plot of this story, and for the time being, only Rose knows the truth.

Lovely review, as always. Thanks lululuna :)


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