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Review:Rumpelstiltskin says:
Hello there!

The imagery was lovely :). It was a perfect way to set up the scene at the beginning of the chapter. I've noticed you have the tendency to use similar techniques at the beginning of other chapters as well (IE the fist paragraph of chapter 6 setting up the mood, etc.). It's a very powerful technique (gets us readers hooked from the beginning).

Here you've done both. We have a scene set up and then we move right down into the mood. At first the mood created offered a bit of relief as she reflects on the antics of the Weasley twins. Then you used her reflection of the Battle of Hogwarts (and Fred's death :( ) to alter this mood (as well as providing the readers with a bit of background information). Most generally the darker mood would come before the comic relief, so this set up created a frenzy of emotions for me: I was amused, and then sad, but then I was okay as the story progressed. I see why you set it up this way and I quite enjoyed it :)!

Oh look at Rumpel focusing on imagery and tones and moods! Moving right along.

Plot twist! That was a shock. The execution was brilliant. I've never been any good at effective plot twists so I can't help but feel a bit envious :).

Immogen allowing Bagman to be set free was quite honorable, I think. Her characterization is developing dynamics and that's always fun to read!

The last paragraph was fantastic! I almost expected to see a reference to the quote, but no, it was simply your brilliance!

I can't wait to see where you are going to take this!

Until then,
-Rumpel

Author's Response:
*sqe* your reviews are always so lovely and I never know how to respond to them in a way that gives your kind words justice but trust me, they really do make my day!

Originally, this chapter was supposed to start from the scene where 'Maeve' and Imogen have dinner and 'Maeve' comforts Imogen on her mother and her choices. However, I later decided that the chapter was a bit bland and maybe some back story would be nice. Thus, a brand new start to the chapter was created.

I really think that reference to canon characters (such as Fred and George) and their personalities and links with OC characters is very important when it comes down to making a story authentic so that is something I really wanted to try out for myself. Also, many people all over the wizarding world say Dumbledore as a beacon of hope against Voldemort and Imogen is no exception, so that is why I chose to incorporate a bit of Dumbledore-ness into the start of the chapter.

And aw I didn't mean to mess up your emotions! But I guess if I did then maybe I did an OK job with the detail? *hopeful face*

I have never ever planned, wrote and then carried out a plot twist in all my years writing on HPFF. Never. Plot twists and I don't go together well. At all. I always end up going of on a tangent and start writing about Voldemort on a killing spree one second and then sherbet lemons the next. So it's a very happy and proud feeling to know that you liked it, seriously! It made me smile :)

I really hope you carry on reading and thank you so much for being such a faithful reviewer and reader, I appreciate it so much!

Bella :)


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