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Review:MissesWeasley123 says:
Hiya!

Well, well... Isn't this interesting. I've seen this story a couple of times being updated, but never got around to reading. I'm glad I've gotten around to it now.

I adore your title, and your chapter titles. What a clever idea, to use cards. I wonder if they all have something to do with one another. We shall see!

A lot of the beginning, was poetic in a way. I really enjoyed it. The scenery you painted was chilling, and this seems like a classic Who-Dun-It type of story, it's really interesting.

One thing I found a bit strange was why Barty was there. I'm sure in Goblet of Fire, Sirius wasn't sure whether or not Barty was a Death Eater. But if Barty's in the company of Bella and Narcissa, that voids Sirius' point in the books. Just something to stress upon, but it can be overlooked. More of a nit pick really.

Overall, I think you did a really good job building a first chapter and introducing the plot. I'll be back for some more whenever I can, this exchange was really fun to do!

- Nadia

Author's Response: Hey there - thanks so much for stopping by! :) I'm glad you decided to stop by this time and that you liked it!

Thanks! :) I honestly don't remember where the cards came from, but I can say that they won't be turning up in any particularly significant way as such (well, probably not at any rate...), but they might slip in towards the end ;) It was more of a metaphor than anything else.

I'm so happy you think that and that you liked it! It took me a while to get that scene to 'feel right' to me so I'm glad you like it.

Ooh, Barty. Yeah, a couple of people have commented on him being there when all the rest are family members... it will be explained later, and Barty's not really in the company of Bella and Narcissa ;) Not sure if that's quite a clue yet, but ah well :P He is there for a reason, though, I promise! :D

Thank you so much for the wonderful review and for the great swap - I really enjoyed it! :)

Aph xx


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